Romeo and Juliet
Introduction: Love conquers all. Romeo and Juliet are two young people that are very much in love. Even though they both come from feuding families. Romeo is a romantic character that loves Juliet more than himself or his family. This is true love.
Paragraph1: Romeo expresses his love for Juliet, “ Call me but love, and I shall be new baptized; henceforth I will never be Romeo.” (2.2 50-51). Romeo is saying that he will no longer be a Capulet if Juliet really loves him. “ Let me stand here till thou remember it.” (2.2 172). Romeo is so in love with Juliet that he wants to stand outside her window for as long as possible just to be with her.
Paragraph2: Juliet expresses her love for Romeo, “ and the place death, considering who thou art, if any of my kinsmen find thee here.” (2.2 64-65). Juliet is warning Romeo that if her kinsmen see him then he will be killed. She obviously shows concern for him. “ Sweet, sweet, sweet nurse, tell me, what says my love?” (2.6 54) Juliet is anxious to hear from her “love” Romeo when the nurse delivered a message to her.
Paragraph3: Juliet still loves Romeo through thick and thin. This includes Romeo killing her cousin Tybalt. “Blistered be thy tongue for such a wish! He was not born to shame.” (3.2 91-92) Juliet is mad at her nurse for shaming Romeo. Juliet also said “ That villain cousin would have killed my husband.” (3.2 101) Juliet is actually happy that Romeo killed Tybalt instead of Romeo being dead. He is still banished.
Conclusion: I think this really is true love. Romeo and Juliet are two young people that are very much in love even though they both come from feuding families. Romeo is a romantic character that loves Juliet more than himself or his family. Love conquers all!
yousra · 1 decade ago
First of all, congratulations on writing a draft of the conclusion and then asking for help. On a purely grammatical note, you want to make sure that you italicize the title and make sure the subjects and verbs agree in your sentences. One way to ensure this is to make your introduction more concise, and cut the sentence down. Here is a suggestion:
During the course of The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet dramatic irony, foreshadowing, and comic relief all play a pertinent role in developing profundity and emotional attachments.
Also, you will want to use a shorter quote of two or three words or no quote at all in your conclusion. You can use the entire quote in another place. Some people like to start with a short quote as a hook, as you would in an introduction. That is an option too. However, you will need to choose a different one.
Clearly, you are going to need more to your introduction now. You have a thesis sentence, and that is good. The thesis sentence is the focus of your essay. All you need now is to add a hook before the thesis and three sentences after the thesis where you describe each of your three points in more detail. You can also add a concluding sentence after that that leaves your reader with an overall message