Graduate Medicine Personal Statement Example

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Below is a personal statement from a recent applicant for A100 Medicine at Oxford. It is not perfect and it may not be suited to every medical school. There is no single template for success in terms of an application to Oxford. Other styles can be equally effective: we encourage individuality and diversity in our students. This statement is however a good example for an Oxford application because it helps us see that the applicant is attempting to match ourselection criteria.

An applicant's personal statement is likely to be discussed by tutors during interview.

A well-written statement will not in isolation gain you an interview or a place. It forms one part of an application from a gifted applicant that can be considered alongside other information - academic record, BMAT score, school reference, interview performance - in the selection process at Oxford.

Statement & comments

Choosing to study medicine is not a decision I have taken lightly. It isn't a career I have wanted to do since a particularly young age, nor did a life changing event prompt my choice. I have thought very long and hard before deciding to apply.

Admissions tutors may be sceptical of exaggerated descriptions of a revelatory moment or lifelong desire to become a doctor.

At first glance, this might seem like a down-beat opening paragraph. Although you may think that an arresting opening statement will impress, admissions tutors may be sceptical of exaggerated descriptions of a revelatory moment or lifelong desire to become a doctor. This introduction shows honesty and a degree of introspection. Throughout the statement, the applicant works hard to show that they have a realistic view of medicine. You won't prove that you have the motivation for medicine by simply saying that you do: it is what you have done to inform yourself about the career - and the views that you have formed - that will convince us that you really know what being a doctor is like and that this is what you want to do.

Various periods of work experience have taught me much about the career. A local hospital placement gave me the opportunity to visit A&E, Radiology and Obstetrics and Gynaecology.

You won't prove that you have the motivation for medicine by simply saying that you do.

Whilst fleeting, these visits to the departments highlighted the variety and diversity of the fascinating specialities medicine encompasses. A placement shadowing a clinic staff was hugely informative regarding daily life as a doctor. During the day I sat in on consultations ranging from routine post natal checkups to discussions of treatment for young people with diabetes and overactive thyroid glands.

You won't be judged on what you've done: we want to know what you learned from doing it.

This student describes their experiences of healthcare that have helped them decide that they want to study and practise medicine. We understand that opportunities to obtain experience vary, so you won't be judged on what you've done: we want to know what you learned from doing it. The description of the placements here isn't over-exaggerated, and the applicant takes care to explain what they have seen and done and the insight each opportunity afforded them. The relatively detailed account of the infant's check-up conveys the impression of engagement during the placement and suggests an intellectual curiosity to understand the infant's condition and its treatment. The applicant also takes care to point out an example of the importance of good communication skills and argues how their sales position has helped them develop such skills.

Throughout my time there the doctor's genuine interest in his cases and unfaltering motivation highlighted to me the privilege of having such a stimulating profession. This, together with the ever advancing nature of a career in medicine, was brought to the fore by an infant who was having a check up as a result of her being put on an ECMO machine after her birth with Meconium Aspiration Syndrome. The ease with which the doctor broached and dealt with sensitive subject matter also emphasised the importance of a warm, approachable manner and an ability to communicate to a person on their level of understanding. I believe I have honed these skills and gained invaluable experience of the eccentricities of the general public myself in my job as a salesperson.

It is important to convey an impression of engagement and intellectual curiosity when talking about any work experience/placement/voluntary work.

Since February of this year I have volunteered in a care home for a couple of hours each week. I assist with serving meals to the residents as well as feeding one of the more infirm ladies. My time there has brought to my attention the more unpleasant side of medicine and has proved by far the most useful work experience I have had; preparing me for the stark realities of physical ageing and senility. In spite of this, I genuinely enjoy my time there; giving residents, some of whom go months without visitors, 10 minutes of my time to chat can be very rewarding in the obvious enjoyment they get from it. The experience has shown me very clearly the importance of caring for the emotional as well as the physical needs of patients.

The applicant presents evidence that they have become well-informed about the realities of healthcare.

This paragraph reaffirms the applicant's motivation for medicine. They admit that working in a nursing home is not glamorous but explain how rewarding it has been. There is evidence of analytical skills here and there is no doubt that the applicant has become well-informed about the realities of healthcare. Empathy comes across as well, with the applicant recognising that a brief interaction can have such a positive effect on the overlooked residents of the home.

Outside of my lessons I enjoy orienteering with a local club. As part of an expedition I took part in, we walked 80km over 4 days in torrential rain. The challenging conditions demanded teamwork and trust to maintain morale and perform effectively as a group; as well as calm rational thought in stressful situations. Also, through this activity and the people I met, I have become a member of the SJA which has enabled me to gain first aid qualifications and go out on duties.

Although the bulk of a personal statement should be academic-related, it is important to show a life outside of studying. The involvement in a club or association demonstrates wider spare time interests, and the description of the challenging walking expedition provides evidence that the student can work with others and can cope in an arduous situation, obliquely suggesting that they might have the capacity for sustained and intense work. The student also shows that they understand that taking time out to relax and manage any stress is important, and conveys the impression of good time management. The passing reference to the drama group reinforces the impression that this applicant is a team-player. It is useful to describe sporting or musical interests although, as, this applicant shows, these non-academic interests don't need to be particularly high-powered ones.

Other activities I enjoy include drama - I was a member of a local group for 6 years - cycling and playing the guitar and piano which allow me to relax.

Non-academic interests don't need to be particularly high-powered.

I know that medicine is not a "9 to 5" job and is by no means the glamorous source of easy money it is often perceived to be. I understand the hours are long and potentially antisocial and that the career can be physically exhausting and emotionally draining. It is apparent that becoming a medic will involve inherent sacrifice.

However medicine is also a deeply gratifying and fascinating career path. I want to be a medic because my passion and aptitude is foremost scientific and to me 5 or 6 years more of formal education followed by a lifetime of further learning sounds like a stimulating career option and, thankfully, a far cry from the monotony some jobs pose. Nevertheless, as an intrinsically social person, I would relish a career requiring the development of strong empathic relationships with patients too. Crucially, I know I have the enthusiasm, capacity for hard work and the open and enquiring mind needed to succeed in such a fulfilling vocation.

Fact-finding placements have given the applicant insight and motivation in order to decide upon a a career in medicine.

In the concluding paragraphs, the statement is emphasising that, although aware of the negative aspects associated with the practice of medicine, fact-finding placements have given the applicant the insight and motivation to be certain that it is the right career for them. The applicant ends by summarising the key personal attributes that they believe make them well-suited to medicine.

Verdict and advice for improvement

Of course, there is room for improvement with this statement. No reference is made to the scientific subjects that are being studied at school or to particular modules that the applicant has found particularly exciting: this could have helped convey enthusiasm and curiosity in science. Although the applicant asserts that they have an 'open and enquiring mind', there is no description of any extracurricular project or reading that the applicant might have undertaken, perhaps to help them understand a highly-charged ethical issue.

Despite those omissions, this is an effective personal statement. It is well constructed, connects with the reader, and the material flows in a logical sequence. It further conveys the impression that the applicant has done the research and knows exactly what is in store: they are not applying with a naive view or because that is what is expected of them. Writing a statement along these lines would provide a good foundation for a competitive applicant and offers lots of material that can be discussed at an interview.

*This document is still being edited… please be patient :)*

The Personal Statement…

The main barrier between you and that all important medical school interview and then that offer. The personal statement is there to show the admissions tutors who you are and why you deserve a place at medical school.

Personal statement basics…

4000 Characters (With spaces!) approximately 1 A4 page on word at size 12 font
-It is to show off WHOyou are and WHY you want to study medicine
Start Early!!
– it WILL
take many drafts, cause tears and bloodshed 

simples…

Before you start writing you need to…

Understand what the medical schools are looking for

Each medical school will release a prospectusfor you to look through, this will give you an idea of what each medical school wants to see in a medicine applicant.
They want to see that you have the qualities of a good doctor,

What are the Qualities of a good Doctor you ask?? Well….
– Communication
– Teamwork
– Empathy
– leadership
– Confidence (Note: NOT arrogance)
– Good humour!! <- one of my own
– Interest in teaching – Medicine is an art AND a science
– Dealing with pressure
– Respectful and mature –

But also think why are these good qualities to have? 

They want you to reflect on your work experience – Do not list achievements
Pick a few experiencesthat you can relate to and where you have shown the              kskills that a good doctor needs, always REFLECT not list.

They want to see WHO you are and how YOU are a well-rounded person

Academics are all well and good but you need to be a well-rounded person to succeed at anything in life. Show them in your personal statement you have some hobbies.

You don’t have to be a whizz kid winning hundreds of awards and playing rugby for England and having grade 8 in 20 billion instruments. Just have something to show them what you do to relax and how it makes you a grounded well-rounded person.

Anything from music, sport, scouts, guides, youth groups, scrapbooking, running, writing, photography. It can be anything

Don’t be put off by other applicants
I was put off by other applicants! Lots of them will have the 1000 A*’s, play hockey for England and be a world chess champion…

While I on the other hand, was slugging at the back with B’s and C’s in school, no fancy sporting achievement – I don’t run unless I’m being chased – Or awards/grades etc. I was just myself.


Most importantly….Be confident!

Note:I had a guy from a unamed university tell me my degree wasn’t a real degree at one of my interviews and asked me “How did you manage to get an interview?”
And lets just say i didn’t see him on the offer holder day…

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How do I start writing my personal statement?

Each person is different but this is how I found really helped me write my personal statement

Spider diagram or a brain storm or whatever politically correctway you call it…

1. Put medical school in the middle
2. Write around outside the various qualities you need to demonstrate in your personal statement (Teamwork, empathy etc…)
3. Look at the universities you are applying for and look on their website it will give you a HUGE clue to what they look for in candidates use those BUZZ WORDS
4. Brain storm the different idea’s you have for each one

You will find you will get something like this…

Example of mine

You will find once you start thinking about the different experiences you have and how you can interlinks them you will begin to write sentences and paragraphs.
Don’t worry about length, just keep writing about your experiences. 

The first draft
It will NOTbe any good – trust me…
I took 19 drafts until my final one was sent, this is normal! Expect to generally do at least 5+ drafts, if not more until it’s any good.

 

The general generic structure of a personal statement

 

Paragraph 1 – the introduction
This is where you need to grab attentionDO NOT  start with a cliché – hundreds of applicants will start theirs either with:
“From a young age…”
“My fascination with the human body…”  
“ever since I burnt holes in my PJ’s with my chemistry set…”
ALSO, starting with a quote is also risky… and takes up valuable space
Don’t worry too much about the introduction, I wrote mine at the end of writing the rest of my personal statement… It’s easier to do last.

 

 

Paragraph 2: Work experience
Work experience is the norm when applying for medical school. You will need some, not only for your UCAS but to also see if medicine is in fact an avenue you want to explore and not just another academic conquest Seriously look at biochemistry if you want academia…

You will need to REFLECT on your work experience and how you have experienced what it’s like to be a doctor then REFLECT how you have those qualities yourself.
So think of questions like this…

1. When you saw the Dr’s/nurses/HCA/cleaners/physio’s etc etc working together as a team, why is it important?What did you learn from observing?Whose role did you gravitate to the most?

2. How was the Doctor communicating with the patient? Was the patient difficult to communicate with?What was he doing well? – Have you ever demonstrated these skills? Why are they important?

3. What are the pro’s and cons of medicine? Do the pro’s out weigh the cons?

By answering those questions you have just reflected on why you want to study medicine and how you have the skills in place to do so… Rinse and repeat!

 

 

Paragraph 3 – Volunteering

This is the section to show the uni’s what you have done volunteer wise:
St Johns/Red Cross
Care home
Hospital volunteering
Assisting in a school
Charity shop etc…

This is where you can demonstrate a commitment to medicine, show what you have learnt from you volunteering and what skills it has given you to assist you with a career in medicine.
What has it taught you?
Communication? empathy?confidence?

 

 

Paragraph 4 – Hobbies

This section is about how you are a well-rounded individual
As mentioned above it is the section to show off your hobbies and relate them to medicine.
If you play on a team do you show leadership skills? teamwork?
Have you achieved anything outstanding?
How do you balance your work/life? why is that important?

 

 

Paragraph 5 – conclusion

This is where you need to conclude you personal statement.
You will need to round up everything you’ve said and think of a final statement to why you deserve a place at medical school and how you are suited to medicine.
This section will pull together once your main body of text is complete.

It should be the smallest section of them all.

Other stuff

Lots of people ask about writing about certain things in their personal statement:
Books
Yes you can write about a certain book you’ve read, but be warned at interview the interviewer can catch you out and probably will know more about it than you – this has happened to many applicants, so if it’s in your personal statement make sure you’ve actually read it!

Mentioning a specific disease etc
This is all well and good, but again you are not in medical school yet and the interviewer can quiz you on this heavily.

Name dropping
Dropping the name of the consultant you know or worked with wins NO brownie points, just don’t do it at all.

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